A ciliated Siren
sweeps
wheat wreaths
through silent spheres
of plasma
To the iris
of electric chains----
“Quivering folds
seek rootlets”
For gelignite jewels
jazz the Zephyr
into a parish of angel claws
lashing craters
of dynamite sublime
Fire on a heap
of crumbled stars
never spares
the Volcanic Nucleus
When cerise skies
writhe and burst
a Wine-woven Dowry
Undulating through Asia
This amber almond
dappled down
fungus fleshed----
perimetric perspiration
While hydrogen hydras
hiss and ooze
a magma masquerade
blooms
Lightning coils languid
in the southern Sepulcher
of burnt crystal
polydactyl fractals slumbering
into furnace
From the domes
of crimson cream
saffron shards drop coral
into Hedonistic Districts.
Atonement
for sap-trapped sunbaths
of halos and highborn...
Celestial lion
thrusts its geode throne
on the nation
an incandescent candor
of the heliocentric court
-----------------------------
His aurelian avalanche
of cinder swans
sets and rises-------------
-inspired by Mina Loy’s “Lunar Baedeker”
To be perfectly honest, I don't understand majority of the words in this poem and therefore find it incredibly difficult to follow. However, I thought the structure, alliteration and subtle rhymes used throughout were beautiful. It seems like it does a great job of showing and not telling. I enjoyed reading despite my ignorance!
ReplyDeleteHehehehe this is wonderful! I do get so caught up in the music and I especially enjoyed reading it aloud! One stanza I thought was a bit confusing was, "Atonement
ReplyDeletefor sap-trapped sunbaths
of halos and highborn... "
Where did atonement come from? Did I miss something?
Otherwise, this is a powerful and pleasing-to-the-ears poem!
Wow, this poem demonstrates wizardry over vocabulary and alliteration:
ReplyDelete"a ciliated siren sweeps"; "wheat wreaths"; "silent spheres"; "iris of electric chains"; "gelginate jewels jazz"; "cerise skies"; "amber almond"; "dappled down"; "fungus fleshed"; "perimetric perspiration"; "hydrogen nydras hiss"; "magma masquerade" etc, I think I'm quoting every line of the poem :)
While I'm with Shoshana that it was a challenge for those of less noble vocabulary, I don't think it's the poem's responsibility to talk down to us -- I like that it trusts its readers and entices us to extend ourselves :)
I think the poem really succeeds in describing an infinite universe with regality and fantasy, treasures and flames. It has religious connotations as well, with "angel claws," "atonement," "celestial lion thrusts its geode throne on the nation...of the heliocentric court."
The descriptions here are "out of this world" (hehe literally :), I do wonder if there's room here for any kind of movement or plotline. Your poems so far have been magnificent snapshots of breathtaking moments -- I'm thirsting to see it step outside itself and be shaken up a bit.
Nonetheless, this is a really amazing poem.